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The death of someone special

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I have experienced several deaths of someone special. At the late twenties, my father passed away from the pancreatic cancer. When I was in the middle of forties, one of my close friends died of disease. I lost another friend and my parents in law several years ago. Six years ago, my elder brother passed away from the pancreatic cancer. And last year I saw another friend's death. The older I am, the more deaths I face. I have learned and felt the law of nature that everyone dies and unlike birth death doesn't have the order or turn.

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Hello, Gi Yean!
I totally agree with you! Death is unavoidable but still unpredictable. A healthy person can pass away suddenly, and a strong person can suddenly become weak. I think no one can ever be fully prepared when it comes to death. It also saddens me to hear about your father and brother. Hopefully, you can stay healthy and avoid contracting the same illness they had.
- T. Caitlyn
I have experienced several deaths of someone special. 
>> CORRECT
At the late twenties, my father passed away from the pancreatic cancer. 
>> In my late twenties, my father passed away from pancreatic cancer.
When I was in the middle of forties, one of my close friends died of disease. 
>> When I was in my mid-forties, one of my close friends died of a disease.
I lost another friend and my parents-in-law several years ago. 
>> CORRECT
Six years ago, my elder brother passed away from the pancreatic cancer. 
>> Six years ago, my elder brother passed away from pancreatic cancer.
And last year I saw another friend's death. The older I am, the more deaths I face. 
>> CORRECT
I have learned and felt the law of nature that everyone dies and unlike birth death doesn't have the order or turn.
>> I have learned and felt the law of nature that everyone dies, and unlike birth, death doesn't have an order or turn.
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