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Homework - \'The power to change the past \'

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Well.. if i have the power to change the past, I would probably wanna change my mind.
I was a student who didn't study anything.
So I wanna tell me in the past. 'You need to change your mind'.
If it happens, i would have gone to better college and traveled to the various countries.
It would have made me feel definitely happy.

Ah! But, If it happens, Because I met my girlfriend from my college I wouldn't have met my girlfriend.
Um.. I will need to think about using the power to change the past.
Actually, There is another reason to need to think about that.
It is that I have a lot of great friends around me. So I hate to forget them.

I think i wrote down a amazing novel.
I hope that you enjoy reading this.
This is just my imagination. He He

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If humans could change their past, I think there would be benefits and drawbacks. But, I really hope we can and just like you, I would study harder back when I was in school. HEHEHE!!! Thank you for sharing your composition and yes, I had fun reading it. ^___^
-Chammy
Well.. if i have the power to change the past, I would probably wanna change my mind.

>> Well... if I had the power to change the past, I would probably wanna change my mind.

I was a student who didn't study anything.

>>Correct

So I wanna tell me in the past. 'You need to change your mind'.

>> So, I wanna tell myself in the past, ¡°You need to change your mind¡±.

If it happens, i would have gone to better college and traveled to the various countries.

>> If it happened, I would have gone to a better college and traveled to various countries.

It would have made me feel definitely happy.
>>Correct
Ah! But, If it happens, Because I met my girlfriend from my college I wouldn't have met my girlfriend.

>> Ah! But, if it happened, I wouldn't have met my girlfriend. Because I met my girlfriend from my college

Um.. I will need to think about using the power to change the past.

>> Um... I will need to think about using the power to change the past.

Actually, There is another reason to need to think about that.
>>Actually, there is another reason I need to think about that.
It is that I have a lot of great friends around me. So I hate to forget them.
>>Correct
I think i wrote down a amazing novel.

>> I think I wrote down an amazing novel.

I hope that you enjoy reading this.
>>Correct
This is just my imagination. He He
>>Correct
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