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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the toughest jobs in the world?

There are so many toughest jobs in the world.
And there are physically demanding jobs and mentally demanding jobs.
I think the toughest job is mentally demanding job.
The mentally demanding job I think is a service job.
They always have to looks happy when meeting customers.
It's their job, they must not show their feelings to others.
So, they can't express their feelings at will.
That's why they always seem to wear masks and work.
So, service jobs worker say they are not good mental condition.
If these things stacks, it hurts more physically and mentally.
I want all of them to be don't sick.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the toughest jobs in the world?


There are so many toughest jobs in the world.
>> There are so many tough jobs in the world.
And there are physically demanding jobs and mentally demanding jobs.
>> CORRECT!
I think the toughest job is mentally demanding job.
>> I think the toughest job is a mentally demanding job.
The mentally demanding job I think is a service job.
>> CORRECT!
They always have to looks happy when meeting customers.
>> They always have to look happy when meeting customers.
It's their job, they must not show their feelings to others.
>> CORRECT!
So, they can't express their feelings at will.
>> CORRECT!
That's why they always seem to wear masks and work.
>> CORRECT!
So, service jobs worker say they are not good mental condition.
>> So, service worker says their mental health isn't good.
If these things stacks, it hurts more physically and mentally.
>> If these things stacks, it hurts more physically and mentally.
I want all of them to be don't sick.
>> CORRECT!

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