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My dream job

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One of my dream job was an architecture . I think when I was in high school A TV show was famous that fixing a house for poor people so many students wanted to be the architecture.

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Hello there, Thomas!

Many of us have their dream jobs. Some of us live our dreams while some may not. Nevertheless, if we plan and work to reach our dream, it is never too impossible to achieve it. It just needs specific steps to get there.

Even if you did not become and architect, your job right now I guess is close or even better than being an architect. Thus, always love what you do at work.

Thanks for sending me this homework. You were not in class today due to your busy schedule but I appreciate your effort in submitting this.

Kindly go over the grammar suggestions  and memorize the correct patterns.

See you next week.

-T. Donna~

One of my dream job was an architecture . 
>> One of my dream jobs was to be an architect. 

I think when I was in high school A TV show was famous that fixing a house for poor people so many students wanted to be the architecture.
>>  I think when I was in high school, a tv show was famous for fixing a house for poor people so many students wanted to be architects.
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