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Do you have any sentimental or special clothing items with personal stories attached to them?

작성자: 이*윤
2023-10-19 499

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There is a skirt that I remember a lot now.
It was a skirt that mix color of pink and black with a very big ribbon that I bought th wear to my uncle's wedding 10 years ago, which has a funny story.
I asked my mom to buy it as soon as I saw it because it was pretty even though it didn't fit me owing to fat.
I hung the skirt and sorked hard to lose weight with the desire to wear it to my uncle's wedding.
Thanks to that, I lost enough weight to wear a skirt, and I wore a skirt that I bought for my uncle's wedding and left a pretty picture.
But, it's a funny and sad story that I couldn't wear a skirt as I gained weight again and ended up wearing it only once at my uncle's wedding and putting it in old clothes collection box.
If I think about it carefully now, I think it was the greed of an adolescent girl who want to look prettier than anyone else at my uncle's wedding.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Yun. It's a touching story about your special skirt, and it's understandable how our feelings and circumstances can change over time. Your reflection on it as the "greed of an adolescent girl" is a valuable insight. Clothing can carry powerful memories and emotions. Remember, it's a reminder of the person you were at that time, and it's okay for our priorities and perspectives to evolve. Thanks for sharing your story! See you in class tomorrow. ^^
~T. Jade^^
Homework: Do you have any sentimental or special clothing items with personal stories attached to them?
There is a skirt that I remember a lot now.
>> Correct
>> OR: I remember a particular skirt very well now.
It was a skirt that mix color of pink and black with a very big ribbon that I bought th wear to my uncle's wedding 10 years ago, which has a funny story.
>> It was a skirt that mixed the colors of pink and black with a very big ribbon that I bought to wear to my uncle's wedding 10 years ago, which has a funny story.
I asked my mom to buy it as soon as I saw it because it was pretty even though it didn't fit me owing to fat.
>> I asked my mom to buy it as soon as I saw it because it was pretty, even though it didn't fit me due to my weight.
I hung the skirt and sorked hard to lose weight with the desire to wear it to my uncle's wedding.
>> I hung the skirt and worked hard to lose weight with the desire to wear it to my uncle's wedding.
Thanks to that, I lost enough weight to wear a skirt, and I wore a skirt that I bought for my uncle's wedding and left a pretty picture.
>> Thanks to that, I lost enough weight to wear the skirt, and I wore the skirt that I bought for my uncle's wedding, leaving a pretty picture.
But, it's a funny and sad story that I couldn't wear a skirt as I gained weight again and ended up wearing it only once at my uncle's wedding and putting it in old clothes collection box.
>> Correct
If I think about it carefully now, I think it was the greed of an adolescent girl who want to look prettier than anyone else at my uncle's wedding.
>> If I think about it carefully now, I think it was the greed of an adolescent girl who wanted to look prettier than anyone else at my uncle's wedding.
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