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If I migrate country I will choose New Zealand. There are good sceneries and people. I had good experiences and memories in there. Weather is also good but little bit cold. They speak English even though I don't understand what they say because of the accent It's much better than German.

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Good morning, Thomas!

New Zealand is a great choice of country to live in. The scenery is majestic and it has a lot of great opportunities to offer. Since you have been there before, you can tell the beauty of the place and the kind of people living there.

Sometimes, it is all about the feeling that a place created in our minds that make us want to go back to a place.

Study carefully the grammar suggestions made below. Your sentences are meaningful and contain correct grammar patterns. Take note of some nuisances in the suggestions.

See you again soon!

-T. Donna~

If I migrate country I will choose New Zealand. 
>> If I migrate to another country I will choose New Zealand. 

There are good sceneries and people. 
>> Correct!

I had good experiences and memories in there. 
>> I had good experiences and memories there

Weather is also good but little bit cold.
>>  The weather is also good but a little bit cold.

They speak English even though I don't understand what they say because of the accent It's much better than German.
>> They speak English even though I don't understand what they say because of the accent but it's much better than German.
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