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My least favorite music

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My least favorite music genre is Ballard. Because I don't like makes me feel down or loose mood. When I listen to the music It means I want to be better not down. So I listen to the funky and up beat music.

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Hello, Thomas!

Different people have different preferences in terms of music. In your case, your mood is strongly affected by the beat. Hence, upbeat music amps up your day.

Well then, play an upbeat music on your car stereo today.

Thanks for this short and meaningful answer. Pay attention to my grammar suggestions carefully below. Great job on this composition!

See you later!

-T. Donna~

My least favorite music genre is Ballard. Because I don't like makes me feel down or loose mood. 
>> My least favorite music genre is ballad because I don't like that it makes me feel down or lose my mood. 

When I listen to the music It means I want to be better not down. 
>> Correct!
Or: When I listen to the music it means I want to be better and not feel down. 

So I listen to the funky and up beat music.
>> Correct!
Or: upbeat

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