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작성자: 정*환
2023-10-16 2601

회원님의 영작문

When most customers visit some hotel for the first time, they usually feel uncomfortable. That is because it is not their own home.
So hotel employees need to make themselves at home by handling them friedly and politely.
Once customers are satisfied with good and kind service, it might be a key point of them to visit the hotel again.
And it might not be a big problem even though some employee made mistakes by being polite and accomodating.
Today I was so busy to set up for the next event which will hold 550 people tomorrow.

Your experience from hospitality industry can be helpful for my English interview as well as speaking it, in my opinion.
So I need you to give me a homework which can relate to English interview like this.
I failed the English interview for the certificate for the 4 times.
I almost gave up, but now I realized how I can make it.
I really think this is my turning point to talk with you.
Thank you Chammy. See you next morning.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Han,

Thank you for sharing your opinion on the question. You really got a good answer but I hope you could elaborate more and give your personal experience where you are able to give customers satisfaction that can give extra support to your answer on why being friendly or accommodating important. With that, you can also build up your confidence and capability to the interviewer. Furthermore, you can also improve your English skills when you write comprehensive compositions.-Chammy

When most customers visit some hotel for the first time, they usually feel uncomfortable.

>> When most customers visit a hotel for the first time, they usually feel uncomfortable. 

That is because it is not their own home.

>>Correct

So hotel employees need to make themselves at home by handling them friedly and politely.

>> So, hotel employees need to make them feel at home by handling them friendly and polite.

Or

>> So, it would be best to make the guests feel comfortable by making them feel at home through friendly greetings and polite gestures. 

Once customers are satisfied with good and kind service, it might be a key point of them to visit the hotel again.
>>Once the customers are satisfied with good and kind service, it might be a key point for them to visit the hotel again.

And it might not be a big problem even though some employee made mistakes by being polite and accomodating.

>> And it might not be a big problem even though some employees made mistakes by being polite and accommodating.

OR

>>And there is no problem with employees being polite and accommodating.

OR

>> And I guess there would be no problem if employees commit mistakes as long as they can admit it and be able to remain polite and accommodating.

Today I was so busy to set up for the next event which will hold 550 people tomorrow.

>> Today I am so busy setting up for the next event which will hold 550 people tomorrow.

Your experience from hospitality industry can be helpful for my English interview as well as speaking it, in my opinion.

>> Your experience in the hospitality industry can be helpful for my English interview as well as speaking, in my opinion.

So I need you to give me a homework which can relate to English interview like this.
>> So, I need you to give me homework which can relate to English interviews like this.
I failed the English interview for the certificate for the 4 times.

>> I failed the English interview for the certificate 4 times.

I almost gave up, but now I realized how I can make it.

>> I almost gave up, but now I realize how I can make it.

I really think this is my turning point to talk with you.
>>Correct
Thank you Chammy. See you next morning.
>>Correct
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