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WRITING TASK: How was your high school graduation?

It was fun but little bit confused.

Half is happy, half is scared.

I thought I'm not ready to be an adult.

When I think about it now, I'm still feel that feeling.

Regardless of age, life is so difficult.

Maybe It doesn't have answer.

All is moment of choice and Choice's size is getting bigger day by day.

These days, I'm little exhausted.

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You have a point, Melody! Life is a never-ending difficulty, but it also has colors. Take care!-Faith-
WRITING TASK: How was your high school graduation?
>> CORRECT
It was fun but little bit confused.
>> It was fun but a little bit confusing.
Half is happy, half is scared.
>> I was half happy half scared.
OR It was bittersweet.
I thought I'm not ready to be an adult.
>> I thought I was not ready to be an adult.
When I think about it now, I'm still feel that feeling.
>> When I think about it now, I can still feel that.
Regardless of age, life is so difficult.
>> CORRECT
Maybe It doesn't have answer.
>> Maybe, it doesn't have an answer.
All is moment of choice and Choice's size is getting bigger day by day.
>> All is a moment of choice and the choice's size is getting bigger day by day.
These days, I'm little exhausted.
>> These days, I'm a little bit exhausted.
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