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I like learning things that interest me. From the past until now, I used to go to places that taught me things I was interested in and learn about them. Among them, the ones I haven't been able to finish properly until now are knitting and embroidery. There are so many ideas I want to learn to knit and make family scarves, small items, dolls, doll clothes, etc., but knitting and embroidery were very difficult hobbies for me because my hands sweat a lot. While knitting or embroidering, the thread broke due to sweat or the desired shape did not come out, so it could not be completed. So, these are hobbies that I still can't let go of.

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Eliana, 
I appreciate your answer this time, it seems that you are not swamped and you were able to construct a long sentence today. Great job and keep it up!
Aki~

I like learning things that interest me. 
>>>  CORRECT! 
OR >>> I enjoy learning about things that capture my interest.

From the past until now, I used to go to places that taught me things I was interested in and learn about them.
>>>  CORRECT! 
OR >>> In the past, I would visit places that taught me about subjects that fascinated me. 

Among them, the ones I haven't been able to finish properly until now are knitting and embroidery. 
>>>   I have always had an interest in knitting and embroidery, but unfortunately, I have not been able to complete them successfully.

There are so many ideas I want to learn to knit and make family scarves, small items, dolls, doll clothes, etc., but knitting and embroidery were very difficult hobbies for me because my hands sweat a lot.
>>>  CORRECT! 
OR >>>  I have many ideas for knitting, such as making scarves, small items, dolls, and doll clothes for my family, but these hobbies have been very challenging for me due to excessive sweating in my hands.

While knitting or embroidering, the thread broke due to sweat or the desired shape did not come out, so it could not be completed. 
>>>  While knitting or embroidering, the thread often breaks due to my sweaty hands, or the desired shape does not come out correctly, which makes it impossible to complete my projects.

So, these are hobbies that I still can't let go of.
>>>  However, I still find these hobbies captivating and can't seem to let them go.
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