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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

economical development is most important goal but it isn't only most important thing.
I think that economical increasing and other increasing have to do at same time.
If government don't care other goal such as democracy, welfare, and education, There will be big risk to people in country.
And sharp economical development can provoke serious decreasing.
Of course, economic development is important, but more importantly, I think balance with other developments is important.

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
economical development is most important goal but it isn't only most important thing.
>>> Economical development is an important goal but it isn't only the most important thing.
I think that economical increasing and other increasing have to do at same time.
>>> I think economical development and others have to be done at the same time.
If government don't care other goal such as democracy, welfare, and education, There will be big risk to people in country.
>>> If the government doesn't care with its other goals such as democracy, welfare, and education, there will be a big risk to people in country.
And sharp economical development can provoke serious decreasing.
>>> CORRECT~!~^^
Of course, economic development is important, but more importantly, I think balance with other developments is important.
>>> CORRECT~!~^^
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