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Q: Why do you think diamonds are expensive?
A: I think diamonds are expensive because of their rarity.
Usually some materials that are common are cheap and other materials that are rare is expensive, and diamonds are very rare materials.
But I think buying diamond is not very efficient.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework!

~T. Divina^^

Here are some notes to consider:

1. I think diamonds are expensive because of their rarity.
>>CORRECT!

2. Usually some materials that are common are cheap and other materials that are rare is expensive, and diamonds are very rare materials.
>>Usually, some common materials are cheap and other rare materials are expensive, and diamonds are very rare materials.


3. But I think buying diamond is not very efficient.
>>However, I think buying a diamond is not very efficient.
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