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Q. What's your favorite food to have on the weekend?
A. These days there is popular snack in korea. The name is Thanghuru. It is melting sugar on the fruit Skewer. It became popular from the youtube with twinkle visuals and ASMR. So some peoples hate that Because it¡¯s so sweet very much. But I like that and Most my friends also like that. So when i had plan to meet my friends, i most ate thanghuru after meal. How about you? Did you try that?

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Hi Su Hye!
Unfortunately, I haven't tried it.
I would like to because I have a sweet tooth.
Anyway, thank you for your effort today.
I hope you have a nice weekend.
Try to review the corrections below.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
These days there is popular snack in korea. 
>> These days, there is a popular snack in Korea. 
The name is Thanghuru. 
>> Correct
It is melting sugar on the fruit Skewer. 
>> It is melted sugar on a fruit skewer.
It became popular from the youtube with twinkle visuals and ASMR. 
>> It became popular through YouTube because of twinkling visuals and ASMR. 
So some peoples hate that Because it¡¯s so sweet very much. 
>> Some people hate it because it's too sweet for them. 
But I like that and Most my friends also like that. 
>> However I like it and most of my friends like it as well. 
So when i had plan to meet my friends, i most ate thanghuru after meal. 
>> So, I usually have thanghuru after my meal whenever I meet my friends. 
How about you? 
>> Correct
Did you try that?
>> Have you tried it?
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