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After school, my mom, me and my sister went to olympic tennis court. It was because the competition was happening o there was a lots of thing too watch and eat. I ate the grill sausage and also I participate in many event. For example, having a photo with tennisball statue or trowing the ball and make it go into the loop where I want. When I did all event, my sister said that she wantto watch the game. So we watched the game. It was first time watching real tennis match.The court was same with NF series break point. It was fun match but it was sleepy to because of the sun!

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Hello Jude! I appreciate your time in making your composition. I am looking forward to reading more of you works. Thank you for sharing your interest about sports like tennis. We will talk more about this in class. I will see you then. Have a good one! Take care! ~T. Lyn
After school, my mom, me and my sister went to olympic tennis court. 
>>After school, my mom, sister and I went to the Olympics tennis court.
It was because the competition was happening o there was a lots of thing too watch and eat. 
>>Since the competition was going on, there was a lot to see and eat.
I ate the grill sausage and also I participate in many event. 
>>We ate grilled sausages and participate in various events.
For example, having a photo with tennisball statue or trowing the ball and make it go into the loop where I want. 
>>For example, you can take a photo with a tennis ball statue, throw a ball so that it goes into the loop you want, and more.
When I did all event, my sister said that she wantto watch the game. 
>>After finishing the event, my sister said she wanted to watch the game.
So we watched the game.
>>So we watched the game.
It was first time watching real tennis match.
>>It was my first time watching an actual tennis match.
The court was same with NF series break point. 
>>The court was the same as the NF series break point.
It was fun match but it was sleepy to because of the sun!
>>It was a fun game, but the sunlight made me sleepy.
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