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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why is sanitation important when it comes to food preparation?

Sanitation is also important because food is out essential element.
When we need the process of cooking food clean, cooking tools also need to be clean.
The reason why, food goes into our bodies.
If the food hygiene is too bad, our bodies can get diseases like a food poisoning.
This disease can be dangerous to weak healthy people.
So, for health, we should clean cook food, and where we eat food location is also important.
The problem is, some people still don't follow sanitation.
So some people don't like eating at restaurants.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why is sanitation important when it comes to food preparation?


Sanitation is also important because food is out essential element.
>> Sanitation is also important because food is an essential element for survival.
When we need the process of cooking food clean, cooking tools also need to be clean.
>> CORRECT!
The reason why, food goes into our bodies.
>> The reason it that food goes into our bodies.
If the food hygiene is too bad, our bodies can get diseases like a food poisoning.
>> If the food hygiene is too bad, our bodies can get diseases like food poisoning.
This disease can be dangerous to weak healthy people.
>> This disease can be dangerous to people with weak immunity.
So, for health, we should clean cook food, and where we eat food location is also important.
>> So, for health, we should make sure that everything is clean before cooking it, and the food stalls' location is also important.
The problem is, some people still don't follow sanitation.
>> CORRECT!
So some people don't like eating at restaurants.
>> CORRECT!

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