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I would like to fishing webfoot octopus near my hometown. There is famous with webfoot fishing spots. There are many webfoot octopus and fishing boats. I will go there within November. I hope to catch many octopus.

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Hello, Thomas!

It seems like you cannot get enough of your fishing adventure. If the weather is perfect and the time is right, by all means, hit the road, throw your rod and catch the webfoot octopus soon!

Of course, don't forget to take pictures and show them in class. I am sure that you will catch more than 10 of them next time.

Great job in getting the last two sentences perfectly. Please study my suggestions.

See you soon!

-T. Donna~

I would like to fishing webfoot octopus near my hometown. 
>> I would like to go fishing for webfoot octopus near my hometown. 

There is famous with webfoot fishing spots. 
>> It is famous for webfoot fishing spots. 

There are many webfoot octopus and fishing boats. 
>> Correct!

I will go there within November. I hope to catch many octopus.
>> Correct!
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