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ESSAY: Some people think it¡¯s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it¡¯s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

sometimes people need to think alone. it is good to be many friends but they used to be tired myself.
They say alike dad. "you have to study this subject. And then you can be success.", "you must not do this. Because it makes you mad."
They interrupt my think and ignore my opinion. Also sometimes they can be help but usally can't them my life.
In honestly, I like to follow my opinion.

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Hello there Lee~!^^As usual, having conversation with you was wonderful. As you accomplish your English goals, keep your enthusiasm going.  good day! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
sometimes people need to think alone. 
>>> CORRECT!~^^
OR>>> Sometimes people need to have their time alone.
it is good to be many friends but they used to be tired myself.
>>> It's good to have a lot of friends. 
They say alike dad. "you have to study this subject.
>>> They act like my dad. "You have to study this subject."
 And then you can be success.", "you must not do this. 
>>> Then you can be successful.", "You must not do this."
Because it makes you mad."
>>> CORRECT!~^^
They interrupt my think and ignore my opinion. 
>>> They interrupt my mind and ignore my opinions. 
Also sometimes they can be help but usally can't them my life.
>>> Also sometimes they can be help but usually they can't contribute anything in my life. 
In honestly, I like to follow my opinion.
>>> Honestly, I'd rather follow my opinion.
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