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Hello.
Weekend has almost gone.
As you know, my worktime on weekend is relatively short, so I prefer weekend to weekday.
Anyway, I've finished the TV show taping.
I saw a patient as usual, as your advice.
Of course, I spent more time to see the patient, because of video.
That's because I couln't stop the patient's words in front of the camera.
Meanwhile, I have a bad news.
I got a shingles; Herpes zoster viral infection.
It happened on my left upper abdomen and cause some pain.
You must be a prophet.
After you mentioned this disease, I've got it.
There was one more bad thing.
Water leak occured from our clinic and ENT clinic below us were flooded.
Since the hose of washing machine was disconnected from the water pipe, plenty of water went down the down floor.
I called the insurance, but I am not sure that the insurance company will solve this problem.
Lastly, there was a psychotic client, she made me upset.
I hope that new Monday will bring me a plenty of blessing.
See you tomorrow.

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Hi, Dr. Ki!

You are right-another week went by like a swift blink of an eye. Since you are very much preoccupied by the weekends, time ticks faster and your efficiency needs to be at its best.

It is good to hear about your taping. I wonder what the patient said in front of the camera while you were acting. I look forward to watching your show soon. Sometimes a cameo is very exciting.

It is unbelievable that you got Shingles! Maybe we should talk about our favorite numbers in the lottery next time so we can be richer rather than having s disease. Well, it must be painful. You must be having a weak immune system lately, thus, boost it with rest and complete nutrition.

A water leak is such a problematic situation. It looks like a terror or horror movie after the disaster it caused! I hope that the insurance company will do something about this concern and respond quickly to solve the leak or at least assist on the expenses.

About the psychotic patient, this interests me. Let me hear your story in class soon.

Your composition is very rich in details and packed with a variety of sentences, expressions, and grammatically correct structure.

See you tomorrow in class!

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

Weekend has almost gone.
>> The weekend has almost gone.

As you know, my worktime on weekend is relatively short, so I prefer weekend to weekday.
>> As you know, my worktime on weekend is relatively short, so I prefer weekends to weekdays./  Good expressions!

Anyway, I've finished the TV show taping.
>> Correct!

I saw a patient as usual, as your advice.
>> Correct!

Of course, I spent more time to see the patient, because of video.
>> Of course, I spent more time to see the patient, because of the video.

That's because I couln't stop the patient's words in front of the camera.
>> Correct!
Or: couldn't 

Meanwhile, I have a bad news.
>> Correct!

I got a shingles; Herpes zoster viral infection.
>> Correct!

It happened on my left upper abdomen and cause some pain.
>> It happened on my left upper abdomen and causes some pain.

You must be a prophet.
>> Correct!

After you mentioned this disease, I've got it.
>> Correct!

There was one more bad thing.
>> Correct!

Water leak occured from our clinic and ENT clinic below us were flooded.
>>  A water leak occurred from our clinic and the ENT clinic below us were flooded.

Since the hose of washing machine was disconnected from the water pipe, plenty of water went down the down floor.
>> Since the hose of the washing machine was disconnected from the water pipe, plenty of water went down the down floor.

I called the insurance, but I am not sure that the insurance company will solve this problem.
>> Correct!
Or: I called the insurance company, but I am not sure that the it will solve this problem.

Lastly, there was a psychotic client, she made me upset.
>> Correct!

I hope that new Monday will bring me a plenty of blessing.
>> I hope that the new Monday will bring me a plenty of blessing.

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!
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