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Are ther any books that have had a profound impact on your life of the way you view the world?

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The author was a professor named Kim Nan-do, and the title of the book was 'It hurts because it's youth.' It is the title of the book atrracted my attention.
I read this book when I was a high school student, and I suffered physically and mentally due to grades.
Due to a lot of stress, I gained more 20 kilograms and got into the habit of binge eating.
I gained a lot of weight, so my self-esteem decreased, and I was depressed, my personality became sensitive, so I fought with my mom every day.
It was a book about self-development, but it helped me a lot to come across this book and control myself during my sick time.
I was able to accept my sick time positively and I looked back on myself, so I could be comforted.
Thanks to this book, I was able to overcome difficult times smoothly with comfort.
I am still trying to overcome difficult things positively, thinking funny, "Oh my gosh. Luckily, God thinks I'm still youth."

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Hi, Yun! This is heartwarming. I appreciate you sharing this. I'm delighted that you've overcome such hindrances and are now developing into the wonderful person that you are. That's fantastic. Thanks for this, Yun. See you in class tomorrow!
~T. Jade^^
Homework: Are there any books that have had a profound impact on your life of the way you view the world?
The author was a professor named Kim Nan-do, and the title of the book was 'It hurts because it's youth.' 
>> Correct
It is the title of the book atrracted my attention.
>> It is the title of the book that attracted my attention.
I read this book when I was a high school student, and I suffered physically and mentally due to grades.
>> Correct
Due to a lot of stress, I gained more 20 kilograms and got into the habit of binge eating.
>> Due to a lot of stress, I gained more than 20 kilograms and got into the habit of binge eating.
I gained a lot of weight, so my self-esteem decreased, and I was depressed, my personality became sensitive, so I fought with my mom every day.
>> I gained a lot of weight, so my self-esteem decreased, and I was depressed. My personality became sensitive, so I fought with my mom every day.
It was a book about self-development, but it helped me a lot to come across this book and control myself during my sick time.
>> Correct
I was able to accept my sick time positively and I looked back on myself, so I could be comforted.
>> I was able to accept my sick time positively, and I looked back on myself, so I could find comfort.
Thanks to this book, I was able to overcome difficult times smoothly with comfort.
>> Correct
I am still trying to overcome difficult things positively, thinking funny, "Oh my gosh. Luckily, God thinks I'm still youth."
>> I am still trying to overcome difficult things positively, thinking, "Oh my gosh. Luckily, God thinks I'm still youthful."
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