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As you know I enjoy running but I would like to say a different thing. I used to be a fan of baseball games when i was university student. I am a fan of Eagles which is represented of my location. But Eagles always lose and the last or second last. When I went to the stadium for watching the game my team definitely lose even home or away. So I stopped watching the game anymore.

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Hello, Thomas!

I guess, genetically, we can be interested with sports or totally be uninterested about it. Since you love running, you can also love sports. Unfortunately, your baseball team needs a lot of support and training to be the best.

I hope that the Eagles can fly and make Daegu proud. This way, you can support them even more and it will be more exciting to watch them. Anyway, even if it is not a sport, catching fish is really one in my bucket list. So I look forward to the day I can catch the fish and grill it myself!

Your sentences are well organized. There are suggestions I made. Please memorize them well. Great job!

See you next week!

-T. Donna~

As you know I enjoy running but I would like to say a different thing. 
>> Correct!

I used to be a fan of baseball games when i was university student. 
>> I used to be a fan of baseball games when I was a university student.  

I am a fan of Eagles which is represented of my location. 
>> I am a fan of Eagles which represents my location. 

But Eagles always lose and the last or second last. 
>> Correct!

When I went to the stadium for watching the game my team definitely lose even home or away. 
>> Correct!
Or: When I went to the stadium to watch the game of my team, definitely, they lose even at home or away. 

So I stopped watching the game anymore.
>> So I stopped watching the game already.
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