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Q.Why do you think many people want to live abroad?
A.Because when we are younger,we should live with our parents. So when we older, maybe we think our country is so bored.
It's why many people want to live abroad.( maybe? It's my thought! )

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Hi there Ann! Happy Friday! How's your day going? I hope you're enjoying your day! Keep writing and improve your creativity!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
A.Because when we are younger,we should live with our parents. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
So when we older, maybe we think our country is so bored.
>>> So when we get older, maybe we may think that our country is so boring. 
It's why many people want to live abroad.
>>> It's the reason why many people want to live abroad. 
( Maybe? It's my thought! )
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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