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Can you share a specific situation where a weakness of yours had an impact, either positively or neg

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I have experienced both situations.
First of all, I have two weaknesses.
It's that I get tired easily and that my feelings are revealed on my face.
When I was working, I didn't do much work, but I felt tired because there were many places I ran around.
After seeing that, the professor said that he would do what he asked him to do, and he let me leave the office on time without asking me to do small things such as copying documents. Also, my coworker recommended me to level up my physical strength, so I have been exercising steadily until now.
In the other situation, I don't remember exactly, I think my mom made me do something, but as soon as I was asked to do it, I was annoyed, couldn't hide my annoying and expression of unwillingness to do and when she checked my expression, she was upset and in a bad mood, and I got into a bad fight with her. It was not a big deal, but I fought honestly with my feelings and it took me a long time to reconcile.
Now, I'm making a lot of efforts to fix

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Hi, Yun! It's nice of you to share these things with me. I appreciate it. Now, with regards to your control of emotions, I think yoga or meditation could help you. I watched YouTube videos saying it changes the way they see their life and the way they are able to control their emotions. I've been wanting to start it too, but sadly, there isn't anything like that here in my hometown. But it's just a piece of advice. ^^ Thanks for this, Yun! See you tomorrow!
~T. Jade^^
Homework: Can you share a specific situation where a weakness of yours had an impact, either positively or negatively?
I have experienced both situations.
>> Correct
First of all, I have two weaknesses.
>> Correct
It's that I get tired easily and that my feelings are revealed on my face.
>> Correct
>> OR: It's that I get tired easily, and my feelings are easily revealed on my face.
When I was working, I didn't do much work, but I felt tired because there were many places I ran around.
>> When I was working, I didn't do much work, but I felt tired because there were many places I had to run around.
After seeing that, the professor said that he would do what he asked him to do, and he let me leave the office on time without asking me to do small things such as copying documents. 
>> After seeing that, the professor said he would do what he had asked me to do, and he let me leave the office on time without asking me to do small things like copying documents.
Also, my coworker recommended me to level up my physical strength, so I have been exercising steadily until now.
>> Correct
>> OR: Also, my coworker recommended that I work on improving my physical strength, so I have been exercising steadily ever since.
In the other situation, I don't remember exactly, I think my mom made me do something, but as soon as I was asked to do it, I was annoyed, couldn't hide my annoying and expression of unwillingness to do and when she checked my expression, she was upset and in a bad mood, and I got into a bad fight with her. 
>> In the other situation, I don't remember exactly. I think my mom asked me to do something, but as soon as I was asked to do it, I became annoyed and couldn't hide my annoyance or my unwillingness to do it. When she noticed my expression, she became upset, and we had a bad fight.
It was not a big deal, but I fought honestly with my feelings and it took me a long time to reconcile.
>> Correct
>> It wasn't a big deal, but I honestly fought with my feelings, and it took a long time for us to reconcile.
Now, I'm making a lot of efforts to fix.
>> Now, I'm making a lot of effort to fix it.
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