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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
In your opinion, what is the most serious dental problem?

In my opinion, the most serious dental problem is oral cancer(mouth cancer).
Oral cancer is occurs in the mouth and gums.
Fortunately, if we find this cancer early, the survival rate is high.
But, if find it late, our life is also fall in danger.
I don't think oral cancer is more common than other cancers.
But, I think we have to also reduce bad habits and maintain a healthy way for life.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille



~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
In your opinion, what is the most serious dental problem?


In my opinion, the most serious dental problem is oral cancer (mouth cancer).
>> CORRECT!
Oral cancer is occurs in the mouth and gums.
>> Oral cancer occurs in the mouth and gums.
Fortunately, if we find this cancer early, the survival rate is high.
>> CORRECT!
But, if find it late, our life is also fall in danger.
>> But, if you find it out late, our life will also be in danger.
I don't think oral cancer is more common than other cancers.
>> CORRECT!
But, I think we have to also reduce bad habits and maintain a healthy way for life.
>> But, I think we have to also reduce bad habits and maintain a healthy way of life.

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