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My top 3 priorities are...

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2023-10-04 1507

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My top 3 priorities are as below.
First of all, making goals is definitely important.
Living with goals make me happy and it tells me what to do next in my life.
Now my goal is getting certificate for hotel management.
That is reason why I decided to take your class.
There is English interview for that.

Second one is thinking anything positive.
I try to enjoy my task I must do.
Even it is thing I hate.

My last priority is people next to me such as co-workers and families and friends.
I cannot handle them with money.
Money can make everything happen but not people.

These are my top 3 priorities.

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Hello Han,
I always appreciate your honest input. I got inspired after reading your top priorities. For me, it seems I constantly prioritize other people and consider what they will say about me. It's also exhausting. So your composition encouraged me and motivated me to keep focusing on my own goals rather than what others think of me. Thank you very much! I can't wait to see you with your hotel management certificate!~^_^
Sincerely,
Chammy
My top 3 priorities are as below.
>>Correct
First of all, making goals is definitely important.
>>Correct
OR

>>First of all, setting goals is definitely important.

Living with goals make me happy and it tells me what to do next in my life.

>>Living with goals makes me happy and it tells me what to do next in my life.

Or

>> Living with goals makes me happy and tells me what to do next.

Now my goal is getting certificate for hotel management.
>>Now my goal is to get a certificate in hotel management.

That is reason why I decided to take your class.
>>That is the reason why I decided to take your class.

There is English interview for that.
>>There is an English interview for that.
Second one is thinking anything positive.
>>The second one is thinking anything positive.

I try to enjoy my task I must do.
>>I try to enjoy the task I must do.
Even it is thing I hate.
>>Even if it is the thing I hate
My last priority is people next to me such as co-workers and families and friends.

>> My last priority is the people next to me such as co-workers, families, and friends.

Or

>>My last priority is those next to me, such as co-workers, family, and friends.

I cannot handle them with money.
>>Correct
Money can make everything happen but not people.
>>Correct
These are my top 3 priorities.
>>Correct
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