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When I went traveling, every time I felt , What a wonderful the nature is .
People can¡¯t do anything against the nature.
Like mountains, canyons and seas,too.
We have to think thankful to the nature and protect it.
And we also have to remember every people are the same position.

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Good day, Ms. Sunny!
Our thoughts are parallel, that's also one reason why I love going out, even the simplest form of nature is beautiful for me.
See you in class!
Aki~

When I went traveling, every time I felt , What a wonderful the nature is .
>>> When I go traveling, I always feel how wonderful nature is.

People can¡¯t do anything against the nature.
>>> People can¡¯t do anything against nature.

Like mountains, canyons, and seas, too.
>>> CORRECT!

We have to think thankful to the nature and protect it.
>>>  We have to be thankful for nature and protect it.

And we also have to remember every people are the same position.
>>> And we also have to remember every people are in the same position.
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