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I can not say exactly when and what my favorite holiday is..
Anyway I really enjoy spending my all of time alone in coffee shop.
That is my great and favorite holiday even though it is just a day.
I usually talk too much with customers and serve them.
So I need time to recharge myself in coffee shop during the holiday.

And there are many logo contests everyday.
I like making ideas and drawing logoes for the contests.
Finally I join it and submitt the logo.
I got win three times .

I like to have my time alone and draw logoes.
That is my favorite holiday.

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Hello, Han!
Thank you for writing. Reading your composition is really interesting as it talks sincerely about you. It's nice to know that you have that kind of hobby to recharge yourself after your busy days at work. And people need to find the activities that they would love doing to balance work and life. Have a great one!~
-Chammy
I can not say exactly when and what my favorite holiday is..
>>I cannot say exactly when and what my favorite holiday is...
Anyway I really enjoy spending my all of time alone in coffee shop.

>> Anyway, I really enjoy spending all of my time alone in a coffee shop.

That is my great and favorite holiday even though it is just a day.
>>Correct
I usually talk too much with customers and serve them.
>>Correct
So I need time to recharge myself in coffee shop during the holiday.
>> So I need time to recharge myself in a coffee shop during the holiday.
And there are many logo contests everyday.

>>And there are many logo contests every day

I like making ideas and drawing logoes for the contests.
>> I like making ideas and drawing logos for the contests.

Finally I join it and submitt the logo.

>> Finally, I joined and submitted the logo.

I got win three times .
>> I won three times
I like to have my time alone and draw logoes.

>> I like to have my time alone and draw logos.

That is my favorite holiday.
>>Correct
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