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What should people in their fifties do and have?
I think when we are in fifties, maybe they have family and their house.
Also they try to get their careers or they already have career and have social position.
they will effort for family's peace at home.

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Your explanation is good and clear, Min! May you achieve all your goals in life before you turn 50 years old.-Faith-
What should people in their fifties do and have?
>> CORRECT
I think when we are in fifties, maybe they have family and their house.
>> I think when we are in our fifties, maybe they have families and houses.
Also they try to get their careers or they already have career and have social position.
>> Also, they try to get their careers or they already have careers and have social positions.
they will effort for family's peace at home.
>> They will make an effort for family's peace at home.
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