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In traditional times in Korea, family culture was very conservative, strict and patriarchal.

Parents and adult had priviledge of teaching their children strictly even with physical punishment.

Social norms didn't respect the human rigft of children and women.

Even parents harass and abuse their children, it was regarded as education.

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Good morning, Ms., Lily!
We are in the same boat! People in the past were more focused on punishment and being strict. All countries have experienced a very difficult life and our parents have prepared us by letting us undergo punishment because they believe that through hardships we can face the challenges of the world in a courageous and strong way.
Talk to you later!
Aki~

In traditional times in Korea, family culture was very conservative, strict, and patriarchal.
>>> CORRECT!

Parents and adult had priviledge of teaching their children strictly even with physical punishment.
>>> Parents and adults had the privilege of teaching their children strictly even with physical punishment.

Social norms didn't respect the human rights of children and women.
>>>  CORRECT!

Even parents harass and abuse their children, it was regarded as education.
>>> Even if parents harassed and abused their children, it was regarded as education.

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