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I would like to share my trip experience in Jeju. I went on the trip in Jeju Island last weekend. I rode a motorcycle which was rented following costal road around the island. I could feel free that time. And I met my friend and his wife. We hung out with them drank a cup of coffee and some bottle of so-ju. I totally hung over last Sunday.

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Hi there again, Thomas!

You had been to many places in a few months I had classes with you. This is actually the perfect time to just bask under the sun in different places while you are young and able. 

Having an enjoyable moment is something that you are good at doing. Hence, enjoy the next trip and share the memorable moments soon from the East sea.

You composed many correct sentences here, great job!

See you!

-T. Donna~

I would like to share my trip experience in Jeju. 
>> Correct!

I went on the trip in Jeju Island last weekend. 
>> Correct!

I rode a motorcycle which was rented following costal road around the island. 
>> I rode a motorcycle which was rented following the costal road around the island. 

I could feel free that time. 
>> Correct!

And I met my friend and his wife. 
>> Correct!
Or: I also met my friend and his wife.

We hung out with them drank a cup of coffee and some bottle of so-ju. 
>> Correct!
Or: 
We hung out with them, drank a cup of coffee and some bottle of so-ju. 

I totally hung over last Sunday.
>> I totally had a hang over last Sunday.
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