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Drunk driving has been a big problem in our country. Actually, there have been many victims due to drunk driving. Innocent children or weak elderly people were injured and killed by drunk drivers recently. Many people made a request to make much stricter laws through public petition. I participated in the petition. I think that our government take clever measures to discharge any kinds of drunk driving and driving in drugs.

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Happy Friday, Gi Yean!
It's nice to know that you took part in activities such as signing petitions for stricter laws against drunk driving. It shows that you care about your country and you give importance to life. Wonderful job on that, and great job on your homework!
- T. Caitlyn
Drunk driving has been a big problem in our country. 
>> CORRECT
Actually, there have been many victims due to drunk driving. 
>> CORRECT
Innocent children or weak elderly people were injured and killed by drunk drivers recently. 
>> CORRECT
>> OR: Innocent children and vulnerable elderly people were injured and killed by drunk drivers recently.
Many people made a request to make much stricter laws through public petition. 
>> Many people made a request to enact much stricter laws through a public petition. 
I participated in the petition. 
>> I participated in the petition.
I think that our government take clever measures to discharge any kinds of drunk driving and driving in drugs.
>> CORRECT
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