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There are many types of desires in human life.

Among them, one of sexual desire the stongest desires is sexual desire.

So we should learn clearly and openly about sex how to control it, how to enjoy it.

We are teaching sex education as formal curriculum in Korea.

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Ms. Lily, 
Thank you for spending your precious time writing your thoughts. As I do, I always agree with your point and I think everything must be done in order and when the time is right.
have a great weekend!
Aki~

There are many types of desires in human life.
>>> CORRECT!

Among them, one of sexual desire the strongest desires is sexual desire.
>>> CORRECT!

So we should learn clearly and openly about sex how to control it, how to enjoy it.
>>>So we should learn clearly and openly about sex how to control it, and how to enjoy it.  

We are teaching sex education as formal curriculum in Korea.
>>> We are teaching sex education as a formal curriculum in Korea.
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