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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: People are becoming too dependent on the Internet and phone. Is it a positive or negative development?

I think it is more negative effect than positive.
Information are the more the better. but the most important thing is gather collect info.
We see many information in YouTube, TicTok, and unnamed dictionary and then this info are incollect.
For example there are info about car. they say that this madicine are cleaned headlights but it isn't not effect.
And the diet method in YouTube are not good for losing weight.
Many info are good. But collect info are the most important.

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think it is more negative effect than positive.
>>> I think the negative outweigh the positive effect.
Information are the more the better. but the most important thing is gather collect info.
>>> Getting much information is an advantage but the most important thing is collecting knowledges. 
We see many information in YouTube, TicTok, and unnamed dictionary and then this info are incollect.
>>> We can read a lot of imformation on YouTube, TikTok and unnamed dictionary and then some information is incorrect.
For example there are info about car.
>>> For instance, information about cars. 
 they say that this madicine are cleaned headlights but it isn't not effect.
>>> They say that this substance can clean the headlights but it isn't effective.
And the diet method in YouTube are not good for losing weight.
>>> Diet information in YouTube is not good for losing weight.
Many info are good. 
>>> Many information are useful. 
But collect info are the most important.
>>> However, collecting information is more important. 
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