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If a group of people just came to your country from overseas, what advice would you give them?

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First, I would have to say public peace of South Korea to them. I'm pretty sure that South Korea is the safest country. You can leave belongings of your everywhere. Also, a rate of crime is very low. So, you can trip anywhere in South Korea. And most of people in here are politely, they could help when you travel to here even though they can't speak English. :)

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Hello Eric! Wow! Great Job! South Korea is a great Country! Well done and continue working on your essays everyday!
Sincerely, 
^^ T. Ara

First, I would have to say public peace of South Korea to them. 
>>> First, I would have to say how peaceful it is in South Korea.
I'm pretty sure that South Korea is the safest country. 
>>> I'm pretty sure that South Korea is the safest country in the world.
You can leave belongings of your everywhere. 
>>> You can leave your belongings anywhere.
Also, a rate of crime is very low. So, you can trip anywhere in South Korea. 
>>> Also, the rate of crime is very low. So, you can travel anywhere in South Korea. 
And most of people in here are politely, they could help when you travel to here even though they can't speak English. :)
>>> And most of the people here are polite, Koreans could help them when they travel here even though they can't speak English. :)
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