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About silent spring.

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회원님의 영작문

There is a famous book name, "Silent spring". This is a book from Rachel Carson the famous activist that 'Times' chosen. Silent spring talks about many pestiside. For example, she mainly talk about DDT. Than she tell us the effect of pesticide to us. Well, the result is very horrible. According to her, Because of pesticide there was a family who had been in a huge trouble and also according to her, she implies that pesticide can kill many creatures like fish, and it will come back to us. The books whole story is pesticide. And why we should ban using pesticide. She's idea is that because of pesticide like DDT, It is giving us and animal massive damage so we should stop using pesticide. And we can know the meaning of the title. The title of this book is Silent Spring because spring is silent with all creatures death, While spring is the best time for animal to play.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Jude! Good job for writing the composition. I'm glad to hear about this book. It is really good for you to have the habit of reading. We can talk more about this in class if you want. I will see you then. Take care always! ~ T. Lyn
There is a famous book name, "Silent spring". 
>>There is a famous book titled, "Silent Spring."
This is a book from Rachel Carson the famous activist that 'Times' chosen. 
>>This is a book by famous activist Rachel Carson, selected by The Times.
Silent spring talks about many pestiside. 
>>Silent Spring talks about many pesticides.
For example, she mainly talk about DDT. 
>>For example, she mainly talks about DDT.
Than she tell us the effect of pesticide to us. 
>>Then, she tells us how pesticides affect us.
Well, the result is very horrible. 
>>Correct.
According to her, Because of pesticide there was a family who had been in a huge trouble and also according to her, she implies that pesticide can kill many creatures like fish, and it will come back to us.
>>According to her, there was a family who suffered greatly due to pesticides and what she also said suggests that pesticides can kill many living creatures such as fish and it will come back to us.
The books whole story is pesticide. 
>>The whole story if the book is pesticides.
And why we should ban using pesticide. 
>>And why the use of pesticides should be banned.
She's idea is that because of pesticide like DDT, 
>>Her thoughts were about the pesticides like DDT.
It is giving us and animal massive damage so we should stop using pesticide.
>>We need to stop using pesticides because this is causing enormous harm to us and to animals.
And we can know the meaning of the title. 
>>And we see understand the meaning of the title.
The title of this book is Silent Spring because spring is silent with all creatures death, While spring is the best time for animal to play.
>>The reason why the title of this book is "Silent Spring" is because spring is the silence in which all things die, and because spring is the best season for animals to play.
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