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WRITING TASK: Why is work etiquette important?

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When we keeps work etiquette, we can be free after all each other.
And even if it's small and trivial words and actions,
If we are careful about all,
our each own space, the feeling of that day, personal activities will be going to be protected.
I think etiquette is like increasing my value and environmental quality.

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This is a good answer, Elle! I am proud of how you answered it with confidence.-Faith-
When we keeps work etiquette, we can be free after all each other.
>> When we keep our work etiquette, we can be free from hurting each other.
And even if it's small and trivial words and actions, 
 If we are careful about all, our each own space, the feeling of that day, personal activities will be going to be protected.
>> Even if they are small and trivial words and actions, as long as we are careful about such, our each own space, our feelings on that day, and personal activities will be protected.
I think etiquette is like increasing my value and environmental quality.
>> I think etiquette is like increasing my value and working-environment quality.
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