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I think Russia and Ukraina are the most dangerous places to travel because of the war. Except for the two countries, I think America is more dangerous country than othet countries. Nowadays there are many gunshots and severe drug problems. Additionally the extreme climate makes the country unattractive place to travel. My second daughter went to Los Angeles last month. She was suffering from extreme hot weather and she gave up her itineraries, such as visiting Grand Cannon.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
I totally agree! Russia and Ukraine are not good places to visit nowadays due to the war. Additionally, America has been in the news for several incidents involving gunshots. But when we think about it, is there still a truly safe place or country? I'm just wondering.
- T. Caitlyn
I think Russia and Ukraina are the most dangerous places to travel because of the war. 
>> I think Russia and Ukraine are the most dangerous places to travel because of the war.
Except for the two countries, I think America is more dangerous country than othet countries. 
>> Except for those two countries, I think America is more dangerous than other countries.
Nowadays there are many gunshots and severe drug problems. 
>> Nowadays, there are many gunshots and severe drug problems.
Additionally the extreme climate makes the country unattractive place to travel.
>> Additionally, the extreme climate makes the country an unattractive place to travel.
My second daughter went to Los Angeles last month. 
>> CORRECT
She was suffering from extreme hot weather and she gave up her itineraries, such as visiting Grand Cannon.
>> She was suffering from the extreme hot weather, and she had to give up her itineraries, such as visiting the Grand Canyon.
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