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Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What harm does pollution do to the environment?


Various kinds pollution do to the environment.
Environmental pollution do not only affects nature, also affects animals and people.
The Environmental pollution will give a bad effect on everything, like a butterfly effect.
First of all, we'll have a food problem.
Bad environment location food will be poisonous to us.
In addition, the pollution environment make our get sick.
And, the problem is, this situation is ongoing.
So, I feel afraid of the future because of this environmental pollution.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What harm does pollution do to the environment?



Various kinds pollution do to the environment.
>> Many kinds of pollution can harm the environment.
Environmental pollution do not only affects nature, also affects animals and people.
>> Environmental pollution does not only affect nature, it also affects animals and people.
The environmental pollution will give a bad effect on everything, like a butterfly effect.
>> CORRECT!
First of all, we'll have a food problem.
>> CORRECT!
Bad environment location food will be poisonous to us.
>> A bad environment can also affect food production, which can also be dangerous to us.
In addition, the pollution environment make our get sick.
>> In addition, a polluted environment can get us sick.
And, the problem is, this situation is ongoing.
>> CORRECT!
So, I feel afraid of the future because of this environmental pollution.
>> CORRECT!

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