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As I got married, started a family, and my children grew up, I realized that I needed money, and that my retirement and my children's future would not be easy if my husband was alone in his economic activities, so I started working hard.

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Hello Eliana,
Thank you for doing your homework once again.
Building a family requires sacrifice and "more" responsibility. I totally agree with you that we need to work to help our husbands. Another wrong concept in the Philippines is that if another party works in another country, they're already rich. Some people ask me why I need to work when my husband is working abroad. they do not understand our purpose.
Have a good day!
Aki~

As I got married, started a family, and my children grew up, 
>>> After I got married,  my family and my children grew up

I realized that I needed money, and that my retirement and my children's future would not be easy if my husband was alone in his economic activities, so I started working hard.
>>> CORRECT!
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