¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

homework 09.18

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÃÖ*Ç
2023-09-18 492

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
When do you prefer to have a family gathering?

As far as I know, there is in Korea culture that respect families and adults.
So, there were many days when family members gathering and met for adults.
For example, the birthday of relative, the anniversary of I don't know relative, etc.
But these days, this kinds of days disappear .
Because, everyone is busy.
So I think, it's good for a family to meet twice a year.
Because, I like my relatives meet in a long time.
But, there are often happened uncomfortable situations.
That's why I fell like or dislike the day when my family gathering together.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
When do you prefer to have a family gathering?


As far as I know, there is in Korea culture that respect families and adults.
>> As far as I know, there is a Korean culture that we should respect families and adults.
So, there were many days when family members gathering and met for adults.
>> So, there were many days when family members gather and meet adults.
For example, the birthday of relative, the anniversary of I don't know relative, etc.
>> Birthdays of relatives and the anniversaries of relatives I don't know are examples of these gatherings.
But these days, this kinds of days disappear .
>> But these days, these kinds of days have disappeared.
Because, everyone is busy.
>> That's because everyone is busy.
So I think, it's good for a family to meet twice a year.
>> CORRECT!
Because, I like my relatives meet in a long time.
>> >> That's because I would like to meet my relatives after a long time.
But, there are often happened uncomfortable situations.
>> But, there are uncomfortable situations that often happen.
That's why I fell like or dislike the day when my family gathering together.
>> That's why I dislike the day when my family gathers together.

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
130788 homework ¾È*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 859
130787 homework 09.05 ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 938
130786 Would you rather be able to teleport or read minds? ¼Û*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 1052
130785 Homework ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 9
130784 What thing will you always carry in your bag? ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 491
130783 What risks are you willing to take to reach your dreams? ¹Ú*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 644
130782 Homework ±è*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 1087
130781 Why are some people more intelligent than others? ¿¡*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 5
130780 Where do you prefer living in, the city or the countryside, why? Á¶*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 2
130779 How do you handle conflicts or disagreements within your... Á¶*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 1
130778 What are the good and bad things about traveling? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 664
130777 HOMEWORK: Please write a short paragraph about \"What I want to... ¾Ù* ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 2
130776 Homework- 230905 PART1 ¾ç*¾Ö ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 3
130775 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 1017
130774 Homework ±è* ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 1
130773 Homework JA*UNG CHUNG ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 476
130772 HOMEWORK: Writing Exercise: How do you manage your workweek and... ¼­*ÅÃ ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 1215
130771 HOMEWORK: Writing Exercise: Would you rather live in a house or... ¼­*ÅÃ ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 717
130770 3 ÀÌ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 581
130769 WRITING TASK: How can role models help us? ÀÓ*Áö ¿Ï·á 2023-09-05 2

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04