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Hello, T. Donna.
How was your day?
There were enough patients/clients in the clinic, so we could get a good profit.
In his freetime from the work, Dr. MJ tried to train new staff managers and think of marketing.
He expressed his good emotion to me today, but it was restricted.
I thought that it was a sign of recovery.
After our clinic closed, he proposed that we would hire a new doctor to support us.
Since he knows me very well, he is considering two day off weekly for each of us next year.
Absolutely, I agree with him about it.
Thus, we need a back-up doctor when each of us will work alone.
We discussed about the contents of recruitement announcement.
After a while, we finished it, and I posted the announcement in the website of doctors.
We failed to hire a new doctor before, and I really want a success in this time.
Regarding my homework, there is a legendary leader in Korea history.
Maybe, you heard the name "Lee soon-sin".
Most Koreans and even some japaneses respect him.
See you.

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Good afternoon, Dr. Kim!

This day is looking very nice. The fog is creeping on my father's roof and it will rain later, it seems. I feel at peace and accomplished after checking your essay.

Your clinic has been performing stronger than ever. Of course, there will be tough days yet your resilience and consistency in service is the major key to your collective success. I hope that as years go by, your clinic will be more renowned and  serve a wider scope of clients and patients all around Incheon as well as your neighboring towns. But first, the hunt for the best doctor to join your your company is a big task and I hope he or she will read your announcement soon. When this comes into fruition, you can finally indulge into your two-day rest.

Like the brilliant military strategist Lee Sun Shin, the admiral who led several 16th century naval battles in which outnumbered Korean forces repelling the Japanese invasion, you can manage all adversities at work with wise and responsible leadership along with Dr. MJ and your whole team.

You always write correct sentences and maintain accuracy in grammar and idea contents. Study my suggestions to level up even more.

Have a very good lunch!

See you then.

-T. Donna~

Hello, T. Donna.
>> Correct!

How was your day?
>> Correct!

There were enough patients/clients in the clinic, so we could get a good profit.
>> Correct!

In his freetime from the work, Dr. MJ tried to train new staff managers and think of marketing.
>> Correct!

He expressed his good emotion to me today, but it was restricted.
>> Correct!

I thought that it was a sign of recovery.
>> Correct!

After our clinic closed, he proposed that we would hire a new doctor to support us.
>> Correct!

Since he knows me very well, he is considering two day off weekly for each of us next year.
>> Since he knows me very well, he is considering a two day off weekly for each of us next year.

Absolutely, I agree with him about it.
>> Correct!

Thus, we need a back-up doctor when each of us will work alone.
>> Correct!

We discussed about the contents of recruitement announcement.
>> Correct!
Or: recruitment

After a while, we finished it, and I posted the announcement in the website of doctors.
>> Correct!

We failed to hire a new doctor before, and I really want a success in this time.
>> We failed to hire a new doctor before, and I really want a success this time.

Regarding my homework, there is a legendary leader in Korea history.
>> Regarding my homework, there is a legendary leader in Korean history.

Maybe, you heard the name "Lee soon-sin".
>> Correct!

Most Koreans and even some japaneses respect him.
>>  Most Koreans and even some Japanese respect him.

See you.
>> Correct!
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