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Nowadays, many latchkey kids are existed, because parents are working outside.
When I was young, many mothers didn't work outside.
In my case, my mother always cared for me, and made good environments for me to focus on studying.
However, as many women consider realizing their dreams as more valuable things than raising children, many children have to stay at home for a long time.
I think this situation makes kids lonely, but it has several advantages.
First, children get independence from their young ages.
Also, they can learn from their parents' life.
When they observe their parents' life, they can learn the value of work and make their dreams.

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Good morning, Stella! Thank you so much for always being diligent in answering your homework. I have always admired your dedication in learning English. We will keep on doing more activities in our future classes to ensure that you can have further development in your skills. See you next time! ~ T. Marie ^^ 
Nowadays, many latchkey kids are existed, because parents are working outside.
>> Nowadays, many latchkey kids exist becasue parents are working outside. 
When I was young, many mothers didn't work outside.
>> CORRECT SENTECE
In my case, my mother always cared for me, and made good environments for me to focus on studying.
>> In my case, my mother always cared for me, and made good environment for me to focus on studying.
However, as many women consider realizing their dreams as more valuable things than raising children, many children have to stay at home for a long time.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
I think this situation makes kids lonely, but it has several advantages.
>> CORRECT SENTENCE
First, children get independence from their young ages.
>> First, children learn independence from their young age.
Also, they can learn from their parents' life.
>> Also, they can learn from their parents' lives.
When they observe their parents' life, they can learn the value of work and make their dreams.
>> When they observe their parents' lives, they can learn the value of work and make their dreams come true.
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