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I wouldn¡¯t visit Taiwan again.
The food was too greasy to me .
And I had a bad memory at there.
My two friends had argument with religions and food. Until now their relationship is uncomfortable.

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Hello again, Ms. Sunny!
Thank you for this! I find it ridiculous that two people ruined their trips because of food and religion. We just need to respect each other's creed and not insist on what we want. Besides, no one wins in a religious argument.
have a good afternoon.
Aki~

I wouldn¡¯t visit Taiwan again.
>>> CORRECT!

The food was too greasy to me .
>>>The food was too greasy for me 

And I had a bad memory at there.
>>> And I had a bad memory there.

My two friends had argument with religions and food.
>>> My two friends had an argument about religion and food.

Until now their relationship is uncomfortable.
>>> CORRECT!
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