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What¡¯s the worst natural disaster in your opinion?

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I think flood is the worst natural disaster. In our country at this summer, here had many disaster. Because cause of flood is environment problems. These day the earth has hot, so melt ice in the south pole.
In other case, our country have many basement house in Seoul. Because their is more than cheaper other apartments. because of the flood, they were died at last summer.
So the worst natural disaster is flood.

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Hello Su,

I appreciate your homework discussing floods, and it reminded me of the recent incident in Korea. Your effort in addressing this topic is commendable, and your writing is improving. Keep up the good work, and stay motivated in your English studies. I'm here to support you

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think flood is the worst natural disaster.

>>I think a flood is the worst natural disaster.

In our country at this summer, here had many disaster. Because cause of flood is environment problems.

>>In our country, this summer, we experienced many disasters because the cause of floods is environmental problems.

These day the earth has hot, so melt ice in the south pole.

>> These days, the Earth has been hot, causing the ice in the South Pole to melt.

In other case, our country have many basement house in Seoul. Because their is more than cheaper other apartments. because of the flood, they were died at last summer.

>> In another case, our country has many basement houses in Seoul because they are cheaper than other apartments. Due to the floods, some people lost their lives last summer.

So the worst natural disaster is flood.

>> Therefore, the worst natural disaster is a flood.

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