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For me, it seems that what influences career choice are my interests, aptitude, and environment. I unconditionally chose a job that stimulated my curiosity and gave me pleasure that suited my personality, but now that I am married and have a family, environmental factors have also influenced me, and by helping my husband with his work, I have developed a certain level of ability and have even had a job that I had never thought of. same.

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Great day Eliana!
First off, I appreciate you for diligently doing your homework. By the way, when you are writing, pay attention to the use of proper punctuation like the period (.) It makes the reader understand your sentence more :)
Have a great learning experience!
AKi


For me, it seems that what influences career choice are my interests, aptitude, and environment.
>>>  CORRECT!

I unconditionally chose a job that stimulated my curiosity and gave me pleasure that suited my personality, but now that I am married and have a family, 
>>>  CORRECT!

environmental factors have also influenced me, and by helping my husband with his work, 
>>>  CORRECT!

I have developed a certain level of ability and have even had a job that I had never thought of. same.
>>>  CORRECT!
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