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ESSAY: Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

I think change is good for human. Of course, all changes are always good for our. But change is good.
If human are afraid, change our developments are stop and we will be end.
we against each other and gain our experiences. These experience changes our life.
I think that change in human being is good for life.

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Hi there Lee~!^^ How's your Thursday going? Well, it's sunny here and I love the beautiful day! I hope you're doing great too! See you tomorrow!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA 
I think change is good for human. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> I think change is good to people.
Of course, all changes are always good for us. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
But change is good.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
If human are afraid, change our developments are stop and we will be end.
>>> If humans are scared, developments will stop and end.  
we against each other and gain our experiences. 
>>> We will be against each other and gain our experiences. 
These experience changes our life.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> These experience can change our life.
I think that change in human being is good for life.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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