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Umm,,,i¡¯m sorry to hear that story. The most necessary thing for them is money. The most common way to earn money is working but there are no person who work extra hours. So i think to raise the money for them is the best way to help them. I as normal person don¡¯t have a lot of money to help them. But if people like me gather and donate to them a mall amount money, they can stand their feet on.

There is saying that don¡¯t give starving man fish instead teach how to catch a fish. Even though donating money for them is important, we have to teach how to earn money from work.

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Your opinions were expressed well, Jun! I also believe that when helping, we should help wisely and practically.
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Umm,,,i¡¯m sorry to hear that story. 
>> I feel sorry to hear that story. 
The most necessary thing for them is money. 
>> CORRECT
The most common way to earn money is working but there are no person who work extra hours. So i think to raise the money for them is the best way to help them. 
>> The most common way to earn money is by working, but there are no people who work extra hours, so raising money for them is the best way to help them. 
I as normal person don¡¯t have a lot of money to help them. But if people like me gather and donate to them a mall amount money, they can stand their feet on.
>> I, as a normal person, do not have a lot of money to help them, but if people like me gather a small amount of money to donate to them, they can get back on their feet.
There is saying that don¡¯t give starving man fish instead teach how to catch a fish. 
>> There is a saying that we should not give a starving man fish, instead teach them how to catch fish. 
Even though donating money for them is important, we have to teach how to earn money from work.
>> Even though donating money to them is important, we have to teach them how to earn money from work.
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