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ESSAY: Earlier technology developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Technology developments give our benefits by good life style.
For example people can go further place fastly by train. and can go abroad by airplane in one day.
Internet is made educated people without school. Smart phone can be chat other people every time.
Of cause, these developments are unfair factor. But i think that it is more good things than bad things

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Hello there Lee~!^^ How are you today? I hope your doing fine! See you tomorrow!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Technology developments give our benefits by good life style.
>>> Technology advancements benefit us by promoting healthy lifestyles.
For example people can go further place fastly by train. and can go abroad by airplane in one day.
>>> For instance, people can travel quickly by train and fly across the world in a single day.
Internet is made educated people without school. 
>>> The internet has given so information to people without going to school.
Smart phone can be chat other people every time.
>>> We can use our smartphone to chat with other people any time.  
Of cause, these developments are unfair factor.
>>> Of course, these developments have negative factors too. 
 But i think that it is more good things than bad things
>>> However, I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. 
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