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Why do some people panic in a situation when other people remain calm?

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When Everyone have some surprised situations, Some people can¡¯t hide their face. Just they open their things and feelings.
That¡¯s not fault. Just Maybe that is weak point about outside and playing social community.
If they get unjust things in their any situation, they can¡¯t hide their feelings. So that making situation is more bad for own.

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Hello Su,

You've touched upon an interesting topic about why some people become anxious in certain situations while others stay calm. Your explanation is straightforward, and you've made some valid points. Keep practicing, and your writing will improve even more!

~Teacher Cathy

 

When Everyone have some surprised situations, Some people can¡¯t hide their face.

>>When people encounter some surprising situations, some can¡¯t hide their expressions.

Just they open their things and feelings.

>>They just open up about their things and feelings.

 That¡¯s not fault.

>>That¡¯s not their fault.
Just Maybe that is weak point about outside and playing social community.

>>Perhaps that is a vulnerability when it comes to interacting with the outside world and engaging in social communities.

If they get unjust things in their any situation, they can¡¯t hide their feelings.

>>If they get unjust things in any of their situations, they can¡¯t hide their feelings.

So that making situation is more bad for own.

>>This can make the situation worse for themselves

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