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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How do you feel about making choices for other people?

In everyday life, there are many moment that we choose for other people.
Among them, we helping someone people don't know the street way on the street
or friends and my family member helping the hard work.
So, If I have a chance to someone help, I will choose to help among the my time and help.
Sometimes there are selfish people, but making choices for other people is a good idea.
In my opinion, everyday behavior is important help for other people.
Because, I believe when I need some help, someone will do help for me.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
How do you feel about making choices for other people?


In everyday life, there are many moment that we choose for other people.
>> In our everyday life, there are many moments that we choose or make decisions for other people.
Among them, we helping someone people don't know the street way on the street
or friends and my family member helping the hard work.
>> Among them, helping someone we don't know on the street, friends or even family members is the most common one.
So, If I have a chance to someone help, I will choose to help among the my time and help.
>> So, if I have a chance to help someone, I will choose to help them at any time.
Sometimes there are selfish people, but making choices for other people is a good idea.
>> CORRECT!
In my opinion, everyday behavior is important help for other people.
>> In my opinion, our everyday behavior is important in helping other people.
Because, I believe when I need some help, someone will do help for me.
>> CORRECT!

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