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When I was suffering from friend problems, a friend I was with in my 20s got married to a man I really liked and lived well, got pregnant, had a child, and as time went by, my relationship with my friend and her husband became distant, and my friend's husband, whom I thought was honest, became friends rather than sincerity. It was a problem with a friend who was having a hard time because he was drinking and having fun and showing too much irresponsibility, and his in-laws blamed him for it because the wrong woman came to the house, and even scolded him for not going to college. Nevertheless, I tried to live well and while recovering my relationship with her husband, I became pregnant with my second child. However, my friend's husband was caught embezzling at the place where he worked and was taken to the police station, and other terrible things happened to my friend that were too difficult to handle, so I cried and had a hard time together. I remember.

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Hi Eliana!
Whew! This was tough especially if you have a very good relationship with that friend. Thank you for sharing this and I hope that your friend will be able to cope with her situation. This is the best time to show that a friend in need is a friend indeed.
Fighting!
Aki~


When I was suffering from friend problems, a friend I was with in my 20s got married to a man I really liked.
>>>  My friend became my problem because  I was in my 20s when my friend got married to the man I really liked.

and lived well, got pregnant, had a child, and as time went by, my relationship with my friend and her husband became distant,
>> They lived well, she got pregnant and had a child, and as time went by, my relationship with my friend and her husband became distant.

and my friend's husband, whom I thought was honest, became friends rather than sincerity. 
>>>  My friend's husband, whom I thought was honest, became friends rather than sincere. 

It was a problem with a friend who was having a hard time because he was drinking and having fun and showing too much irresponsibility, and his in-laws blamed him for it because the wrong woman came to the house, and even scolded him for not going to college.
>>> CORRECT!

Nevertheless, I tried to live well and while recovering my relationship with her husband, I became pregnant with my second child.
>>> Nevertheless, I tried to live well and while recovering from my relationship with her husband, I became pregnant with my second child.

However, my friend's husband was caught embezzling at the place where he worked and was taken to the police station, and other terrible things happened to my friend that were too difficult to handle, so I cried and had a hard time together. I remember.
>>> However, my friend's husband was caught embezzling at the place where he worked and was taken to the police station, and other terrible things happened to my friend that were too difficult to handle, so I cried and had a hard time together. That's what I remember.
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